Reviews for A Merciless Affection
| TRE |
2005.06.23 - 02:38AM |
12: Think of It, a Secret Engagement |
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| This chapter had me flummoxed from the very begining (I can think of no better word). The wide range of emotions that you've had me experience was amazing. Amusment, outrage, excitement, sorrow, frustration, and concern. Amazing! |
| TRE |
2005.06.23 - 02:23AM |
10: When You Find |
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| Finally! Some talk of birth control or something like it. Interesting that he would not have used a prevention potion on her prior. In your potterverse are there none? Almost mind boggling. I like it that she surprises him and leaves him without nearly as much control as he'd like. |
| TRE |
2005.06.23 - 02:15AM |
9: He's With Me, Even Now |
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| The Raven? Or some sort of Poeish art. I'm not overly familiar with his works.
Much enjoyed the conversations in this. Including his continuing hope that she would steal the invisibility cloak!
I'm wondering about contreception since I don't think it's been mentioned yet. Potion or charm? |
| TRE |
2005.06.23 - 01:46AM |
7: Surrender to Your Darkest Dreams |
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| Your characterization of Snape is just wonderful! He doesn't undress nor does he really undress her which is curious for fiction and altogether very real. I'm really enjoying Sarah's character as well. She's making a foolish mistake but she's stilling using her head to justify it while she's doing it. |
| TRE |
2005.06.23 - 01:24AM |
6: Here, I Have a Note... |
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| This line: -“Are you above stealing?”- made me laugh out loud! |
| TRE |
2005.06.23 - 01:11AM |
5: Past the Point of No Return |
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I have to say that the sex was very impressive. I think that realism is a much better tool than some of the ridiculous romantic drivel that gets spouted. It hurts the first time no matter what and contrary to popular fan fiction belief not everyone has an orgasm the first time, if at all the first several times! I've spoken about this in depth with different genre's of fan fiction writers and it's still my opinion that honesty is the best policy when dealing with the deflowering of virgins in fiction. Therefore this is a rather long-winded compliment to an realistic sex-scene. I'm also of the opinion that I don't think Snape would be a very good lover in the beginning-lack of experience. I don't think he's getting it on the side unless it's with prostitutes and only rarely at that. I agree that he has probably performed rape as a death eater and I do not think he's a virgin. I enjoyed this line: " Snatching up his wand from the sheets, he slid out of the bed. “I’ve no doubt,” he said, with still a hint of breathlessness that marred the sneer, “that you will find this crass. But I’m not about to waste perfectly good ingredients.” - the breathlessness was the perfect touch. It belies his usual snarkyness and makes him human. Three things that always interest me in any Snape-centric romance: what's the explanation for the hair, when will she mention his teeth, and last where are his private quarters and what do they look like? I'm fond of the two you've described so far. It's late, I'm rambling, but I wanted you to know I enjoy this.
Author's Response: I *love* rambling reviews! I am totally in agreement with you about "romance novel sex." I've tried to make this story as realistic as I can, so far as human interactions go. So I've tried to debunk a lot of the pet peeves I have about Snape/student fics and romance stories generally. Thanks again for reviewing, and I hope you continue to enjoy! |
| TRE |
2005.06.23 - 12:50AM |
4: No Second Thoughts |
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| Amazing. This is so beyond anything I've read before with him and a student that isn't Granger. Your description of his private quarters is exactly as I have pictured it. |
| TRE |
2005.06.23 - 12:41AM |
3: My Instructions Should Be Clear |
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| This is moving along faster than I thought and I NEVER would have expected him to admit an attraction. I think I'm in safe hands for this story and I can't wait for the next chapter! |
| TRE |
2005.06.23 - 12:31AM |
2: What a Change |
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I admit that I am very excited to find this story. It's SO difficult to find an interesting OC romance that actually works well with Snape. Even more difficult if it's a student. The writing and dialogue are well done and the fact that you seem to enjoy writing this story shows. I was so excited when I realized that Spinnet and Johnson were her roomates! Duh! And I love the continued mentioning of the Weasley twins! Yay! Aside from that, after only one chapter I think that Sarah is flushing out to be a very independent character and one that I am enjoying. Very level-headed and modest for a Gryffindor. I'm already interested in some of her background.
Author's Response: Welcome aboard! I hope you continue to enjoy what I've done with this idea. Thanks for your several reviews! |
| Floris |
2005.06.22 - 11:32PM |
29: Here in Hell, the Blood Runs Deeper |
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Oh! What a great chapter. "How many steps down the cliff had it taken before he had reached that point where he’d known he had to stop? What had it been like to have Dumbledore say: keep walking?" That is the single most poetic illustaration of that scenario I have ever read.
Author's Response: I used to be a poet. Stopped for a long while. Took it up again, then got blindsided by graduate school. Maybe I'll have a go at it once more. I'm glad you liked it!
I've been so amazed at the variety of responses I've gotten on this chapter. Dark, too dark, not dark enough. I'll definitely settle for great, though. Thanks! :~) |
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