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| Rebecca | 2007.08.01 - 03:33PM | 8: Strategic Differences | Anonymous |
| Your story is well written. However, I do have one complaint: your plot moves at a very slow pace. You haven't given enough information to hold my interest. The story is labeled as suspense / mystery but so far, there hasn't been anything suspenseful. You haven't provided any hints or clues for a mystery to build upon. I am curious to what Snape is up to, but my curiosity is being replaced by boredom. There's hardly any interaction of a personal nature between the characters, so it's hard to identify with them. Author's Response: You are right: This story does not really belong in the "Mystery/Suspense" genre. I have gone back and removed all genre tags but "General," as that is perhaps more of an honest description. I also agree about the pacing (at least up through the chapters you've read). It is slow, and quite deliberately so. The pacing of the story (along with having to fit in with certain plot and canon constraints) is meant to mimic the procedure that Snape is attempting, and as that involves him ingratiating himself with Petunia (gaining her trust, etc.), it was never going to be something that could happen quickly without one or the other of them being wildly out of character. However, if you are bored, you are bored (I appreciate your being honest enough to say so, btw), and my explaining my choices probably won't make a bit of difference to your opinion! Some things are a matter of taste. I do admit to being puzzled by your last statement though (that there isn't much interaction of a personal nature); a large portion of the story is made up of interactions between characters, whether in the present day (via dialogue) or in the past (via memories/flashbacks), and the plot hinges on Snape and Petunia's "relationship". Perhaps I don't understand your definition of "interaction of a personal nature"? At any rate, I'm sorry to lose a reader, but I am grateful that you at least have taken the time to tell me why. | |||
| Twinheart | 2007.06.15 - 03:12AM | 8: Strategic Differences | Anonymous |
| Rarely have I had the good fortune to come upon fiction so beautifully and adroitly crafted! Your wit and ingenuity amaze me. Thank you for sharing such an exquisite talent! Author's Response: Thank you for such kind words. Not sure I deserve them, but I appreciate hearing from you, and I am glad you are enjoying the story. | |||
| sophierom | 2007.04.01 - 09:37AM | 8: Strategic Differences | Anonymous |
| 02-13-2007 01:29 Rated 10
Oh, you perfectly capture the feeling of teachers in August! ;-D And I love, love, love your Dumbledore. This line was the best interpretation of Dumbledore's actions (or seeming inaction) I've seen: "Snape knew in some rational part of himself that this was what all successful leaders did, what they had to do in order to win, not just individual battles, but entire wars. No one he knew of had ever micromanaged his or her way to victory." I liked the Wilkes' song (interesting view of Slytherin character; Emerson turned a little sour) ... but it scares me a little, too. Snape acting on his own is both a fascinating and scary thing. Looking forward to more whenever you have a chance to update! Author's Response: To hear that you, of all people, love my Dumbledore makes me feel very happy, Sophie--Thank you! I suspect, but have no real proof, that "that August feeling" is a worldwide phenomenon, whichever month it occurs in. ;-) | |||
| Bananafofana | 2007.04.01 - 09:37AM | 8: Strategic Differences | Anonymous |
| 01-28-2007 19:56 Rated 10
yay! An update! | |||
| Anonymous | 2007.04.01 - 09:37AM | 8: Strategic Differences | Anonymous |
| 01-14-2007 02:28 Rated 10
This is such an intriguing, amusing, well-written story. I'm enjoying it very much -- hope you find time to finish it! happyharpy | |||
| Vocalion | 2007.04.01 - 09:36AM | 8: Strategic Differences | Anonymous |
| 12-31-2006 03:24 Ah, the return of Fleagle! :-D I loved the Vance part and the poem, especially the Crup's collar line. Another excellent chapter. | |||
| LogicalQuirk | 2007.04.01 - 09:36AM | 8: Strategic Differences | Anonymous |
| 12-29-2006 14:30 Rated 10
This is my favourite Snape - a brilliant liar and, as Voldemort puts it, entirely too intelligent to be scheming. I wouldn't usually read fics with such a high Dursley-content, but I was pleasantly surprised by your portrayal of them here. Looking foward to the next chapter! Author's Response: I am proud to be a provider of enjoyable high-Dursley-content fic. ;-) Thank you so much for your comments, LQ! | |||
| rambkowalczyk | 2007.04.01 - 09:36AM | 8: Strategic Differences | Anonymous |
| 12-05-2006 23:03 Rated 8
I like reading about about his trips down memory lane, wondering how this will all tie in. Waiting patiently for the next chapter. | |||
| jenonymous | 2007.04.01 - 09:35AM | 8: Strategic Differences | Anonymous |
| 11-12-2006 03:52 Rated 10
Although the waiting Snape was a little nerve-wracking, the spots of humor in his thinking, reading, and remembering were splendid. The verse at the end attributed to Wilkes has me extremely envious. I can't write the least little bit of poetry. Wonderful chapter as usual. I would have reviewed earlier--I got the Owl about the update--but it was a grim week for meetings and busy-ness. Really looking forward to the next! | |||
| Deeble | 2007.04.01 - 09:35AM | 8: Strategic Differences | Anonymous |
| 11-10-2006 01:57 Rated 10
I think my favorite part was the talking desk. Or possibly the completely elementary advice offered by the how-to book. But poor Snape -- JK says Dumbledore has no confidant, but then neither does the Half-Blood Prince. Author's Response: Snape may well get away with "murder", but not blatant abuse of his own office furniture...;-) Thanks for reading, Deeble, and for the feedback. | |||
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