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Reviews for Of Squibs and Wizards

Verity Brown 2005.05.28 - 08:53PM 3: Chapter Three Signed
So, are we going to be skipping back and forth in time? The young Mia is ever so much more informative than the adult one. This is such a realistic diary style. And yet you put so much that's truly interesting in it.

rambkowalczyk 2004.11.08 - 04:18PM 3: Chapter Three Anonymous
Nitpicking point. Who is the Celeste Bitch -the daughter Mrs McIlhenny? The only other reference to that name is the name of her friend at school. Generally speaking good chapter - good at showing her ups and downs and the frustrations of being a squib. If you are going to do the back and forth in time thing with each chapter, then I can accept why her attitude in chap 2 is different than chap 1.

Melpomene Erato 2004.06.08 - 04:33PM 3: Chapter Three Anonymous
Oh, much, much better than chapter 2 IMHO. The Tabasco thing was great. I guess I would have enjoyed chapter 2 more if she hadn't been so very different from her childhood self. For example, in this chapter the word "bitch" is used really well, but the expletives in chapter 2 just gave the impression of a crass person, not the charming one she shows in her diary.

Author's Response: Great point regarding the crassness! She is a belle, but as you will see in later chapters a belle who's done some cool things. Will take your advice and tone down the expletives-thank you so much! I was wondering if you'd give me an opinion of a plan I have for this charater--I want to do a bit of cross over (Vampire Chronicles, namely Lestat and his band) could you maybe drop me an email if you'd be interested in offering your opinion. It's not written , just charater notes (I play God and actually create my charaters from top to bottom when I'm planning a fic)--Need to keep Mary Sue out! Live long and prosper! Titania (HeroBenedick@sbcglobal.net




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