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| Verity Brown | 2005.05.28 - 08:45PM | 2: Chapter Two | Signed |
| I love the line about Albus and Minerva! Mia seems even ditsier than when she was child, though--lots of jumping around. I really wonder where this is going. | |||
| rambkowalczyk | 2004.11.08 - 04:00PM | 2: Chapter Two | Anonymous |
| When she was 9 years old she was very sympathetic to Severus. Now that she's the new muggle teacher she remembers him as a brooding anti-social prick. Why the change? You need more detail here. Obviously something happened between when she was 9 and now. It also might be relevant if you either say what year it is now or what year Harry and Hermione are in now. | |||
| Melpomene Erato | 2004.06.08 - 04:18PM | 2: Chapter Two | Anonymous |
| OK, I know she's been out in the world and has hardened somewhat, but all the "ass" and "prick" seemed off from the character you created in the first chapter. Now she just seems like one of the many, indistiguishable tough, in-your-face ladies from countless Snape fanfics. I think theat southern bell character you created was novel and very promising. | |||
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