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Reviews for Just Like Heaven

JLHufflepuff 2008.04.01 - 07:40PM 1: The Ascent Signed
I think you just "know" Severus. The part that takes place toward the end of DH where you show his thoughts right before death is just perfect! I also like the two memories you showed in this chapter. I love the way it shows that they were friends but very special friends with just a little something more. Their kiss in the Forbidden Forest was so forlorn!!!!

Author's Response: Wow, thanks. I'd like to think I understand Severus, but it is a true compliment to hear I 'know' him. I also glad you enjoyed their doomed romantic relationship. Cheers!

Bella_Portia 2008.03.17 - 01:08AM 1: The Ascent Signed
Hi. Sorry it took me so long to post this. I will do it in two parts, Although I thought the story would have worked just as well had it not been broken up, I could see the logic in dividing it as you did. I thought the writing in the very first section, where you described SS at the point of death, was very strongly written with fine language. That was really beautifully done. I really liked the way you recast the "worst memory," creating your own precursors. The scene in the forest, with the kiss and the levicorpus spell, was very clever, and it worked really well on a couple of levels. First, it demonstrated an intensity of relationship; and, second, it was an original set up for a "different" version of the story. Well done.

Author's Response: Thank you, Bella for taking the time to give me such a detailed review. I really appreciate your specific comments. I also agree that the story could have been together as a whole, and did post it that way on Lumos. This was my first attempt at chapters. I'm glad you felt it was a logical place to break up the story. Thank you again and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Cheers!

morgaine_dulac 2008.03.05 - 04:05PM 1: The Ascent Signed
Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Your welcome. There is another chapter that will be hopefully posted soon. It's a continuation subtitled The Descent. This was the 'happy' chapter.




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