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mkwiant 2012.10.05 - 05:06PM 19: Coming Together At Last Signed
Good Job on the love scene - just a note. It doesn't seem like she's... reaching her peak.. if you know what I mean. She should either come before him or with him. It seems like he's a selfish lover, and i know you don't intend for that. So have her shout too and her body clench... or something. Anyway, sorry for the critique. I do love your story and the way you write!

Melpomene Erato 2004.05.08 - 01:10AM 19: Coming Together At Last Signed
You all are a bunch of horny women!! snicker-snort*. your point being....




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