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Reviews for A More Merciful Man

Jong_Kahn 2010.08.19 - 11:10PM 16: First Flush Signed
Wonderful chapter. I loved Severus' feelings of falling, of being on that precipice, with his fingers giving, of his being tired, and there "being nothing for it" but to give in. Lovely stuff! Thank you!

atheneblue 2009.03.05 - 12:44PM 16: First Flush Signed
Would you be willing to hold a clinic? I want a master's class in the way you write!

Trickie Woo 2007.04.01 - 01:20AM 16: First Flush Anonymous
20-12-2006 08:36

I haven't been able to keep up with reading much fan fic lately, but boy, am I glad I checked tonight and found this. Once Severus knew he was a goner and there was nothing else to do but to take her the writing became some of the most intensely erotic I've ever read.

It was like listening to Wagner's music written for the scene in Tristan and Isolde where they get carried away by their lust for each other and then the music reaches it's summit just as they do.

You've proven that erotic writing does not have to be explicit, that it is far more powerfully erotic when the writer has given it such an excruciating buildup and set such a perfect mood that it spins itself out to the point of almost orgasmic pleasure. At least it did that for me, and I'm going to slip my husband a Viagra in his bedtime drink so I can get the full effect of it.


Kodiak 2007.04.01 - 01:20AM 16: First Flush Anonymous
15-12-2006 19:49 Rated 10

I'm so glad that you added this. That was very well told and perfectly paced. Can't wait to see more... (yes, I am greedy).


greenwood 2007.04.01 - 01:19AM 16: First Flush Anonymous
08-12-2006 05:32 Rated 10

Oh my! That was a bit hot to say the least. What a discription of lust (it sounded almost painfull! Ha). It was like reading about a dam breaking. Great story so far. I thought the plant was such a great lure and bait to get Severus moving in the right direction. It will be very interesting to find out how he "feels the next morning" about his failure to adhear to his stance on this romance.


adele rose 2007.04.01 - 01:19AM 16: First Flush Anonymous
07-12-2006 18:24 Rated 9

Oh, my, that was not the most explicit sex scene I've read, but it certainly was one of the hottest love scenes! It's funny how helping someone, as Snape does here, can break down all kinds of barriers. I do hope that Snape is decent to her, after. I wonder what he will do about Hagrid, not to mention Lupin . . . .

I'd also like to know a bit more about Jane's feelings and thoughts. And what will she think if she ever finds out that Snape had obliviated her before--I suppose the only way she could find out is if he told her. He seemed to feel rather guilty about it. I wonder how this will effect his feelings about the Obliviate.

I was interested in both her "admission" that Snape had been right about having a Squib at Hogwarts and in Snape's reaction, or non-reaction. It's funny that you named her "Jane," as it always seems like a common, plain name, evoking a dull "Plain Jane," but in reality, I have known very few Janes in my life, and the few I have known haven't been ordinary or dull.

Nice chapter!


deeble 2007.04.01 - 01:18AM 16: First Flush Anonymous
07-12-2006 19:59 Rated 10

Wow.

Erm ... that's all. You've rendered me speechless.


Hotgoose 2007.04.01 - 01:17AM 16: First Flush Anonymous
07-12-2006 18:04 Rated 9

Dying to see what happens next, please update soon!





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