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Reviews for Insidious

Jong_Kahn	2011.07.09 - 11:37PM	1: Prologue: After the Vow	Signed
This is a wonderful beginning. I'm so glad to see it's completed; there's nothing to compare with finding a "new" (old) story that one can actually read straight through. It's delicious already, and I can hardly wait to see what you do with it!

Obadiah Slope	2007.04.01 - 09:26AM	1: Prologue: After the Vow	Anonymous
10-22-2006 18:12 Rated 10 I had no idea that you were writing another story! It's a really wonderful beginning, and filled with gorgeous silliness along the way. I really loved "Mrs Mountbatten-Woolley-St. John-Blye" (who sounds much like a Python creation) and this: "Oh, Vernon, we aren’t in danger of becoming lower middle class, are we?" It reminds me so forcibly of Margaret Thatcher. I read the best quotation of Thatcher's the other day, where she said: "They don't remember the Good Samaritan because he was good; they remember him because he had money." head desk And I noticed that Trickie Woo drew comparisons between Petunia and Hyacinth - I'm always happy to see an "Appearances" nod. I met Routledge the other day, as it happens! I thought of you, but I didn't have the guts to go up to her and say: "You must be the Bucket woman?" Alas, I've rambled toooo much, but I'm just so excited at the prospect of another work!

TRE	2006.07.03 - 12:38AM	1: Prologue: After the Vow	Signed
You have a glorious writing style. I suspect that I'm going to enjoy this fiction immensely.

Trickie Woo	2006.05.10 - 11:30PM	1: Prologue: After the Vow	Signed
Your Snape is really Snape; but your Petunia is Hyacinth Bucket (pronounced Bouquet, of course) to a T. I thought that about her even before you got to 'appearances' and how important they were to her. Of course there is no Richard, or Daisy, or Rose, or Violet with her Mercedes, sauna, and room for a pony; but Vernon is very much like Onslow is this story except that he works for a living. I can't wait to see where this goes, update soon. Author's Response: Cheers, Trickie Woo!

Vocalion	2006.05.10 - 05:24PM	1: Prologue: After the Vow	Signed
"There are worse things I could do." What a perfect motto for Snape! And this: "...capital letters listing to the right like anchored ships beset by a fierce crosswind." I love your descriptions. It's the little details you insert like Blye's DIY that always get to me. "Oh, Vernon, we aren’t in danger of becoming lower middle class, are we?” :-D Author's Response: [Want a laugh? Imagine Snape singing that line like Stockard Channing in Grease...] Thanks for the positive reinforcement!

Sigune	2006.05.10 - 09:54AM	1: Prologue: After the Vow	Signed
I'm SO happy you alerted me to this in your LJ, because I have so little time for hanging around archives these days that I would have missed it. I have as few sensible things to say as ever, but your Snape is his usual amazing self (his motto is perfection), and the bedroom scene with Petunia and Vernon is delicious. cough I should confess that despite the Snapey goodness, my favourite paragraph of this chapter is the first one of the Dursley part :). Apart from being particularly apt, it is also particularly beautiful. I can't wait to read more (there is another chapter, yay! Off I go!). Author's Response: Thank you so much for these encouraging words, Sigune!

lunafish

2006.05.09 - 11:54PM

1: Prologue: After the Vow

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Wow, Grainne! I'm already hooked--in fact, I was from the very beginning of the first chapter when I read these beautiful lines: His black hair and robes blended so well with the dark furnishings of the small sitting room that, if one squinted, one might imagine the man to be nothing but a disembodied face, harsh in profile, and a pair of pale hands. As the night wore on, the illusion deepened. The candles in the lamp burned down to stubs, and the edges of objects were eaten away by shadow. This is such a gorgeous image.

But it just gets more interesting and exciting as the story continues. I love how in this prologue you put Snape in his own home, his own element, searching through his own books and rifling through his own wardrobes. It makes sense that he would need to disguise the more interesting of the former, and the contents of the latter really gives us such provocative insights into not only Snape's childhood but also his relationship with his mother.

And Petunia: I really appreciate seeing her as a real person for once, rather than the "evil stepmother" caricature she usually is in both Rowling's story and most fan fictions. I was totally with Snape when he so briefly identified with her, and now I'm dying to find out why she's so important to Snape and Dumbledore's plans and what it all has to do with the unbreakable vow!

Author's Response: Cheers, lunafish! I must say, researching and exploring Petunia's character has been one of the best things about working on this story--frustrating, at times, because of some of the things you've mentioned, but ultimately I've grown to like her (not as a person, mind, but as a character). Your feedback is very much appreciated. :)

Apothecaria	2006.05.09 - 10:32PM	1: Prologue: After the Vow	Signed
Great start! I like the contrast between Severus and the Dursleys in terms of appearances. They are obsessed with them, and he lets all the lights go out. Wormtail is appropriately pathetic. Petunia can only express fear in terms of money. Do her dreams have a magical basis? Author's Response: Thanks, Apothecaria! (Sorry, I can't answer your question right now).

Deeble	2006.05.09 - 07:32PM	1: Prologue: After the Vow	Anonymous
Wow, Grainne -- this is an amazing beginning. Such excellent description, and I really loved the wardrobe, not only because it suggests another famous fantasy tale but because you used it so well to suggest what Snape's adult life has become. Author's Response: Thank you. A "Wow" from you is high praise indeed! :-)

Sophierom	2006.05.09 - 03:25PM	1: Prologue: After the Vow	Anonymous
Wow, this is such fantastic writing! You described the growing darkness of the room so well, and I loved this line: "As the night wore on, the illusion deepened." What a beautiful image, both of Snape in the moment and Snape as a character in the series. Your use of language is just beautiful. I also loved the image of the nail in the Prince wardrobe. That's a great image on so many different levels. You've made Wormtail into an appropriately pitiful creature. And Petunia with her curlers clanking ... perfect! Author's Response: Cheers, Sophie!

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