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Reviews for Lost Souls Found

revolsepans 2006.04.25 - 06:56PM 36: Chapter 36: Holiday Research Signed
I love this story so much that it almost seems disloyal to say something negative. BUT....I find Dylan's written accent very distracting. And actually this chapter is not so bad, but it reminded me of my thoughts on one of the previous chapters. On one hand, if I carefully enunciate the sentences aloud it really does sound authentic. However, reading the details of this accent interrupts the flow of the content for me (--maybe it's one of those "I can't walk and chew gum at the same time" kind of thing). I have an idea of a texas accent in my head, so just a few "y'all"s and "little lady" and so forth can conjure it for me without having all the nuances spelled out. So, that's my two cents' worth.

snapehp 2006.04.18 - 04:45PM 36: Chapter 36: Holiday Research Signed
Poor Rowena, she is having a hard time dealing with the breakup. What a strong woman she is though, not totally falling to pieces. Does Severus realize he caused her more pain, by severing the bond, than any affiliation with him ever could? Now Katrina is noticing something is wrong. I wonder who is going to do the explaining, if she ever inquires about it, as most children do. Great chapter!

Author's Response: Ooooh! You are good! Or I am terribly predictable, which is not so good I suppose. ;) Katrina will, indeed, be asking awkward questions. Children are lovely that way, aren't they? And Severus, being that he is incredibly clueless when it comes to things like 'feelings' has no comprehension of that which seems so obvious to 'normal' people. heh. Thank you very much for your comments. I'm glad you are enjoying the story.

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