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Reviews for Saturnine

JSSumner 2006.01.03 - 02:50PM 1: Garlic In Your Soul Signed
You certainly have talent. Your play of words and vivid descriptions are admirable. However, I find Snape a tad out of character in this one. He seems too harsh without any redeeming qualities. I think Slytherins are too cunning to make enemies out of everyone they meet. Also, I find it hard to accept the heroine as a whore. I agree that Snape needs someone combative, but he also needs someone who is decent and has some moral fiber to teach him a thing or two about trust and how to conduct himself. This girl is poison to his already damaged existence. Again, your writing skills are profound. I am just concerned that the heroine is too sour to make this a believable romance, if indeed you are going to continue. As it stands, I would rather Snape seduce McGonagall than this shrewd serpent. It is going to take all your skills and then some to convince the reader/fan that this woman deserves Snape, and likewise. As you know, we are very protective of our snarky Potions master! Of course, this is only my personal opinion. And despite my reservations about this particular story, I am fond of your writing. Please don't take my comments as derogatory. I am simply pointing out aspects of your story that I think you should take into consideration. Good luck either way.

Author's Response: Well, Snape does lighten up a bit in the second half (still en queue), albeit briefly, but I think maybe we have different interpretations of him. I tend to see him as a singularly unpleasant person whose primary redeeming feature is the fact that, despite being a prickly son of a bitch, is still a GOOD person. (and I'm gonna believe that until JKR proves me wrong, dammit.) He just has a minefield of defense mechanisms a mile wide, and Felicita seems to trip over every last one of them. He's also not making enemies so much as he has absolutely no patience for people he perceives as incompetent. There are very few people he's openly respectful towards. As for Felicita - well, let's just say that she has her own issues, and is certainly not the sort who should be teaching him anything. *g* Two battered ships passing in the night, and all that. But thank you for the comments! I don't mind criticisms at all as long as they're constructive.

Trickie Woo 2006.01.02 - 12:12AM 1: Garlic In Your Soul Signed
I wrote a review for this when I read it last night, I don't know what happened to it. I guess I must have clicked the wrong button. I enjoyed this, especially the scene in the cemetery. I don't know about anybody else, but I would have stopped and watched too. Your B rating certainly suits her, she's nothing if not brazen and I'm wondering if Eugenia, the assisstant he fired, and Felicita Reed are one and the same person. They live in a magical world so changing her appearance and persona would be possible.

Author's Response: Nah, Eugenia is just there as an example of Snape's lack of people skills, although that certainly would have been a funny comeuppance. But thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Lady Whitehart 2006.01.01 - 04:41PM 1: Garlic In Your Soul Signed
Although I'm not 100% sure where you are going with this, I thought it was enjoyable.

Author's Response: Thank you! The second part is currently en queue; hopefully that will make everything clear. :)




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