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| Owlbait | 2005.10.28 - 11:51AM | 9: Interlude Four | Signed |
| Train wreck indeed. And I'm guessing Herms won't be telling Harry "you're delusional, go see this counselor" after she's done with the Malfoy grimoirerie.
Those 'shut up and write this down' bunnies are fierce. If you ignore them they chew on your toes till you give in and write! | |||
| kodiak1 | 2005.10.28 - 11:50AM | 9: Interlude Four | Signed |
| I'm so glad that I found this! I like that you are exploring the baser side of Harry's animosity towards Snape. And you're keeping Snape selfish and snarky, both of witch I consider to be central to his cannon charactor. Now I'm going to find and read your other work ('cause I like this so much, and can hardly wait to read more). Author's Response: Thank you so much, kodiak1! I am so happy you're enjoying this and I hope you enjoy my other stories. :-) I appreciate the review. ~Lisa | |||
| smaranda | 2005.10.27 - 09:28PM | 8: Chapter Four | Signed |
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It's really good, well constructed and appropriately sarcastic. Please go on !
I am aware that an useful review should contain some constructive criticism, so let's say that Shacklebolt seems a little too soft-hearted, and his becoming an Auror in order to counterbalance the "bad" Aurors is not very convincing. I feel also that Ginny's and Harry's conflict comes too fast to the separation - ok, the conflict might have brewed for a long time, but the reader has just learned about it.
But please go on ! Author's Response: Thank you, smaranda! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. Actually, Kingsley became an Auror to protect people from the bad guys, not necessarily other members of the MLE. I've heard quite a few cops give that as their reason for becoming cops -- to protect those who cannot protect themselves. Ginny and Harry? I really was going to carry their argument through a few Interludes, but Ginny had had it. :-) It's quite hard when a character begins dictating the plot. Bad Ginevra! ~Lisa | |||
| Osiodhachain | 2005.10.26 - 08:48PM | 8: Chapter Four | Signed |
| Yay! An update at last! Poor Maggie. Surely it will be a relief for her when she discovers the anonymous donation. Author's Response: Thank you so much, Osiodhachain! Right now, Maggie believes the Denbrow family has 'gifted' her with that money to get out of town. But there should be an update today. ~Lisa | |||
| macabre31 | 2005.10.26 - 03:05AM | 8: Chapter Four | Signed |
| Damn, I really REALLY want to kick that Denbrow womans' arse. What a BITCH! Grrrrrrrrrrr... Okay got that out of my system. I tried to resist reading this just yet, but I couldn't. And, as usual, I'm now hooked. I am wondering if there is something wrong with Maggies' back that the docs didn't find yet. That poor woman; and that poor kid. And Harry needs to let go, but I don't think that's going to happen, unfortunately. Great story, and I definately look forward to more. *waves bye-bye to the ever multiplying bunnies* Author's Response: Thank you so much, macabre31! The line to smack any member of the Denbrow family starts on the left. There definitely could be something wrong with Maggie's back, because soft tissue injury does not appear in diagnostic tests. A lot of people give a lot of money looking for a magical cure. Oops... disregard that. :-) the rabbits are wiggling their ears at you, except for the two who are... rather busy at the moment. ~Lisa | |||
| Zhaneraal | 2005.10.25 - 08:24PM | 8: Chapter Four | Signed |
| Excellent chapter. I love a Snape that has had an unfortunate past, largely due to his own hands. It keeps him more interesting.
And, ooh! I could just slap Elizabeth Debrow. And John Robert. And the whole bloody family. Author's Response: Thank you so much, Zhaneraal! I think a lot Snape's past was definitely his own wrong choices, but I really do think he's paid for that. There is a line forming to go after the Denbrow family. I think more people hate them than the Ripley family. :-) ~Lisa | |||
| greenwood | 2005.10.25 - 04:52PM | 8: Chapter Four | Signed |
| Great chapter! Poor Maggie, I wonder how long it will take Severus to figure out that his money is not going to be used....and what response that will take. This story plot is very well thought out and complicated in subtle ways. Your characters are very life like (the playground scene is so spot on - children can be so mean). I can't wait to find out what happens next! Author's Response: Thank you so much, greenwood! I don't think Severus is going to be a very happy man. Fortunately, I like him when he's unhappy because that's when he'll be the nastiest. :-) I am so happy you feel it's lifelike. That is high praise! ~Lisa | |||
| sinaz0211 | 2005.10.25 - 04:21PM | 8: Chapter Four | Signed |
| Is Mikayla a witch? Or just a very old soul... The whole Denbrow family should be hexed into oblivion. I'll bet you know just the person to do it. Sadly, this small town "founders' rights" attitude is still very much with us. This could be the Midwest, or Ozarks area, or the South, or coaltown Ohio. By the way, no need to be nervous about your shower scene, it was just tart enough! Author's Response: Thank you so much, sinaz0211! Mikayla is a Muggle, as is Maggie. Mikayla has just spent most of her formative years around adults. And the fact of Maggie used to read from her high school books helped give the child a far larger vocabulary. Most small-town seemed to have that one or two families who run everything and are always given respect, even though they no longer deserve it. I could draw correlation between two political families (one liberal, one conservative), but I won't. Thank you for commenting on the shower scene, I've never written a scene like that before, so I was very nervous. :-) ~Lisa | |||
| apisa_b | 2005.10.25 - 04:10PM | 8: Chapter Four | Signed |
| My, that was intense. So much emotion, I feel quite drained after reading it.
The part where you wrote Mikayla's POV nearly brought tears to my eyes, as did the final confrontaton with Mrs. Denbrow.
So a round of patting your plot-bunnies is in order - hug them for me. Author's Response: Thank you so much, apisa_b! This has been a really emotional story for me. Sometimes, when I'm plotting out a chapter (which is whenever I'm away from my computer) I'll get teary-eyed over what I have planned. People are starting to look at me strangely. Or else, I'm noticing it more. :-) One bunny hug coming up! ~Lisa | |||
| Verity Brown | 2005.10.25 - 01:07PM | 8: Chapter Four | Signed |
| I'm always so thrilled to see a new update of this story! I love how realistic you are making this situation, even if it's bad bad bad for Maggie and Mikayla. Bracing for the trainwreck.... Author's Response: Thank you so much, Verity Brown! Your words mean so much to me! And they've made the bunnies dance. :-) Brace yourself, please fasten your seatbelt and put the tray in the upright position. The next chapters going to be rough. ~Lisa | |||
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