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Reviews for Empty Shadows, Lonely Roads

squeaker1940 2005.08.21 - 07:37PM 1: Chapter I Anonymous
i liked your story. i believe that severus did what he had to do and you show his agony at the act.

jh_wheatley 2005.08.12 - 11:50AM 1: Chapter I Signed
I certainly hope it's in JKR's plans to make Severus's motives as you wrote them. Well done.

Anastasia Witchling 2005.08.12 - 12:08AM 1: Chapter I Signed
Awwww, that is so sad! But it sums up how Snape could possibly be feeling after book 6. You should write more stories from Snapes point of view. You did well!

Lady Whitehart 2005.08.11 - 04:10PM 1: Chapter I Signed
"There is no forgiveness for me, no mercy, no compassion, no pity. I deserve none. I want none." *sniffs* He knows he has lost it all. Only the truly brave dare to go into Snape's head. You did good ;^)

tjturtle 2005.08.11 - 01:46PM 1: Chapter I Signed
Yeah, you did pretty awesome. I wouldn't suggest taking lines from some other source to write a story, but you put together pretty nicely. The only thing I can think of to criticize is your lack of detail. You didn't really describe any of the convos between Albus and Severus. It's fine as is, but if ya wanna make it longer or more personal, detail does the job. Congrats on your first!

Verity Brown 2005.08.09 - 11:48PM 1: Chapter I Signed
Gosh, I just want to cry. "And although I donít know where it leads, I know I will walk it alone." So much pain. It's more introspective than I would expect Snape to be (which is, I think, a natural hazard of writing from Snape's POV), but sufficiently moving that I won't worry too much about that. Very nice.

EXECUTR 2005.08.09 - 09:30PM 1: Chapter I Signed
Short, but good. Definitely continue writing.

anrol 2005.08.09 - 05:38PM 1: Chapter I Signed
Boulevard of Broken Dreams is one of my favourite songs, this story fits it well. Thank you.

phoenix 2005.08.09 - 12:39PM 1: Chapter I Signed
I like the metaphor of life to a road and how his road has seemingly turned hopeless. I know that first person is a very hard thing to write and I think you did well. Good job showing the hatred that Severus would feel toward Dumbledore for making him fulfill the vow....One thing to perhaps add to the story would be rationale for why Dumbledore wanted Severus to kill him. There are many different theories floating out there, but I think that would make it more powerful, but it's good that you have mentioned that Severus says he would follow Dumbledore's orders no matter what. I just think that with his begging not to do it, some rationale would really send home the hatred. Just using canon, Dumbledore tells Harry how unimportant his blood is in comparison to Harry's...I think you captured Severus well, the only thing I would change would be when you say "I ran to him", it could just be me, but that seems like too pedestrian a word for Severus to use....All in all, very nicely done. I'm glad that there are so many people who don't think that Snape murdered Dumbledore and that there was a reason behind it.
Jean




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