Reviews for The Wizard and the Muggle
||2005.05.06 - 02:23AM
|So far so good, the story is well written and has me wondering. I hope that the title is what the story is about and that it is not slash. As long as it's about Snape and the woman I will continue reading, and even take some enjoyment out of Lupin being jealous of her.|
Author's Response: No, I would have warned about slash. Your guess is spot on.
I believe that Lupin is too kind-hearted to actually feel a lot of jealousy (okay, maybe a touch of envy), and continued with that particular assessment of his personality.
So . . . (drum roll) stay tuned!
||2005.05.05 - 08:01PM
||2: A Different Sort of Line
|Wow Jesse. I had read the first chapter at ARFFs and wasn't intrigued. Now I AM intrigued. Good job!
Author's Response: Wow! A converted reader! That's praise indeed. Thank you.
||2005.05.05 - 04:37PM
|Snape wasn't as hard on Lupin (no pun intended) as he could have been. Though I do feel sorry for Lupin because it's always difficult to know you'll never obtain the object of your desire (without a case of Firewhisky). Nice start!|
Author's Response: Thank you!
||2005.05.04 - 05:49PM
|Why is this not a Lupin/Snape story? I would love it to be! Well, it's great anyway. And Lupin's reaction is great, he's no wimp here!|
Author's Response: It's not a Lupin/Snape story because I just can't bring myself to pair those two sexually. Lupin does play an important role here, and I chose his character to play that role because I couln't think of anyone else I believed in for it.
Yes, Lupin is no wimp! I have always had more respect for quiet strength than I've had for blatant heroics.
||2005.05.04 - 02:05PM
|Ah, Snape/Lupin is rapidly becoming my favourite slash pairing! I really like the dynamic you've set up between these two. Lupin is very canon in that he's polite and doesn't get ruffled by anything Snape says. Snape is a bit of a gentle Snape here, but the line "I trust you realize that the feeling is most assuredly not mutual?" is a very adult little zinger. I liked that. It's also nice that Remus isn't feminised by Snape - he gets a little dig in on Snape's ego there at the end. And Snape's not gay apparently, which is great, because it always seems a little too convenient when two main characters turn out to be gay. It's nice that you're consciously steering away from some of the less believable plot devices. |
I would suggest that you attempt to show the reader things, rather than tell them things. It makes for much more engaging reading when we see a character behaving a certain way and think, "Ah, Remus is really nervous," rather than having Snape's internal dialogue inform us of that fact.
Overall, however, I really do like the interpersonal dynamic you're setting up between these two men. Looking forward to the next installment!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. There may still be some surprises ahead for you, though.
Your point about showing rather than telling is a good one. I've heard that before, from teachers, etc., but it's one important thing I always seem to forget. Showing is always better than telling. I always feel the writer considers me less intelligent than I am if I have to be told; yet here I am, doing that very thing!
I've always liked Remus; I think he reminds me slightly to a friend of mine (a hetero friend) because of his gentle kindness. That's probably why I think of that character as a friend to everyone.
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