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Greyfalcon 2006.01.02 - 11:53PM 97: Part Third: The Hart Subvertant, Chapter 51, Concluded Signed
Wonderful as always....I am most interested to see how Severus fares at the market...all those Fae exchanging favors..and he such a Slytherian.

Author's Response: Believe me, my falcon of greyish hue, Severus negotiates like the shrewd Slytherin he is. I can't wait until you see the first bit of Ch. 52...!!!

Luminara 2005.12.25 - 06:18PM 43: Part Second: The Hart Rampant: Chapter 31 Signed
As rivetting as a gallery of Picassos, my dear. I stumbled upon it a few days ago and read until exhaustion. It's like a faerie ring for the mind, perhaps? I normally don't gush or even bother to review. Your talent humbles me. Please tell you've written beyond fanfiction. I would love to see more of your work. Also, I am very curious about the research you've done on magical creatures. I've been looking for some in-depth information about dryads, any ideas? Best Wishes! Carrie

rayvyn2k 2005.12.20 - 09:48PM 95: Part Third: The Hart Subvertant, Chapter 51 Signed
How awesome that your husband left a review for you. Hope you have a happy holiday and a glorious new year.

Author's Response: Thanks, darling! Yes, Mr. G has left me quite a few reviews in the past, when the spirit so moves him. (Just usually, he remembers not to leave them from my account.) Hope your holidays were happy and bright as well!

revolsepans 2005.12.19 - 04:21PM 95: Part Third: The Hart Subvertant, Chapter 51 Signed
Great! Keep writing please.....a little Holiday present? Something for the New Year? Thank you for this story.

Author's Response: Indeedy I did put up a new chapter for the New Year! Hope you enjoyed it, and I'm sure the night market chapters will be even more fun, now that it's all set up! :-D

marshmallowstoat 2005.12.19 - 05:25AM 35: Part Second: The Hart Rampant: Chapter 27 Anonymous
Really? Have you ever been to England? Because I am very impressed by how accurate the way your characters interact with their environment feels. Even with the Summertown part I assumed you were relativly intimate with the geography you are letting your characters wander round. It's this level of detail that raises your work far above the average fanfic

Author's Response: Yes, although I'm a native Los Angeleno by birth, I spent several months in England in the late nineties, both as part of a university exchange program and hauling the de rigeur huge backpack from city to city. I do remain a tremendous Anglophile, and plan on taking my husband back for another extended stay within the next five years. I'm glad to hear that my brief stay resulted in a feeling of authenticity in my writing! Thank you!

Guernica 2005.12.19 - 12:02AM 95: Part Third: The Hart Subvertant, Chapter 51 Signed
Action, romance, humor, sex, magical spells and dastardly plots! You've been writing for week after week, racheting up the tension; it's almost unbearable! I hope it'll last.

Author's Response: Thank you, my darling sweetheart of a husband, you're most kind to leave my seven hundredth review thus! (Though you might want to log in under your own account to leave reviews next time, ya big shilly man.) Love you!

leannt3 2005.12.17 - 05:59PM 95: Part Third: The Hart Subvertant, Chapter 51 Signed
Thanks so much for the new chapter. It is great as always. One question and one comment though. Question: I love how you have made this story parallel GoF and have therefore kept the plot fairly canon even though it centers around an OFC (as well as SS of course). With Umbridge's reaction to Emily thus far, I can already imagine her work permit being denied and Emily (in disguise as the new Faery) being an unofficial advisor to DA. Perhaps she's the one who gave Hermione the suggestion to found it. However, I am wondering, are you planning to parallel all the books moving forward (i.e. will your story continue at its current pace for years 5-7 before we get a final confrontation with Voldemort)? Or are you planning on going plot AU sooner with a final confrontation happening earlier in Harry's school life? Please do whichever way you have planned, I will eagerly follow the story regardless. I just want to know so that if it's the former I can steel myself for it being 150 chapters until the conclusion. Comment: With the poisons Severus has provided him and Emily for use in case of capture and with the reference to "Shakespearian tragedy" you had in one of your chapters, I can't help but worry that you might be planning for some Romeo and Julliet type ending, where either Severus or Emily think the other is taken by the enemy and that all is lost, and this character uses the poison to kill him orher self, then the other finds the dead one and kills him or herself. If this is the direction you are going, I beg of you, please, please don't. I really want to see Severus and Emily end up happy. And if this really is the way you are planning on ending, then please consider an epilogue where it turns out that while everyone thinks they are dead, they have actually run away to the Faery lands and are living there far, far away from the worries of the wizarding world.

Author's Response: Yes, you're absolutely right in thinking that the Ministry's paranoia about Dumbledore raising an army at the school may have been founded by his choice of a military officer as DADA teacher - I tried to hint at that in Emily's interactions with Umbridge. Don't worry about a "Romeo and Juliet" ending for Severus and Emily, though - canon says Snape lived through the end of Book 6, and I'm trying to stick with canon as much as humanly possible. Also, I promise Emily won't become one of those Mary Sues who dies in a big tragic diva death scene and who is then angstily mourned thereafter, as I can't stand that kind of thing either. No spoilers as to the ending though! *zips lips* All I can say is, stay tuned!

snarkypants 2005.12.17 - 10:27AM 95: Part Third: The Hart Subvertant, Chapter 51 Signed
::sigh:: Once again, you've watered my eyes, dear hart! I will, of course, wait and see!

Author's Response: Thanks, sweetheart, glad to have you aboard! Yes, I've depicted Elaine as a very heroic and iconic figure here because that's how most people (including Emily) see her, but I'm sure that you can probably appreciate how such a great war leader must feel better than most anyone. Elaine has to be willing to send all those young soldiers out into battle to potentially die - and she has to send her own daughter out there among them, and never show favor. Also, seeing as how Emily is far away from home, she doesn't have to deal with the constant clash of Emily's supporters with the Robinett family's supporters, which for Elaine is a constant headache. We'll see more on this conflict in the upcoming Night Market chapters. Thanks for sticking with it!

snarkypants 2005.12.16 - 10:40AM 95: Part Third: The Hart Subvertant, Chapter 51 Signed
"I have never had anyone die while carrying out my orders, and I don't want that to change."

Rereading the entire saga this week (ripping good read, again, still), and this jumped out at me. As good a commander as you have established Emily to be, this attitude would be counter-productive to the mission objective. From a military standpoint (sorry, I do this stuff 40 hrs/wk), she needs to be able to put the goal ahead of personal considerations. Perhaps you mean to establish that she isn't quite as brilliant a military officer as she seems (certainly not the leader her mother is, as you've said); when she takes on dangerous missions herself rather than delegate it to a subordinate, she puts the entire operation in jeopardy. If she were to be killed, the unit would lose its leader and its cohesion.

You have established Emily as a caring individual, as a take-action person, but as one who puts duty ahead of all other considerations. I would never presume to say that you're writing her wrong, far from it; I love the character, and the universe that you've built. It is, however, an opportunity to discuss the natural conflict that this complex character would feel when doing her duty.

This is a lot of writing for something that is really, really small in the overall narrative, and rather nitpicky, that no one else would probably notice. Please take my comments in the spirit they are intended, which is that of someone who experiences the military point-of-view every day; if my comments offend, feel free to delete them.

Author's Response: No offense taken, don’t worry - I’m actually intensely flattered that you analyzed the characterization this much! Your comments are 100% correct - as Catherine described in Ch. 27, Emily does sometimes get so emotionally invested in protecting others that she exposes herself to unnecessary danger. This tendency is Em’s biggest fault as a leader, and as you can imagine, Dorien’s murder has only made it worse. I have an entire timeline worked out for Emily’s military career and background notes for her relationship with Elaine, although I haven’t gone into it too extensively, because this story is really about Emily and Severus. There’s more to the Emily/Elaine relationship than I’ve been able to fit on the page without making this story even MORE insanely long. Yes, it is true that Em has never had anyone die while under her command, but for all her well-deserved reputation as a great ground infantry soldier, Em hasn’t been a commander for all that long. (The conflict resolved in the 3022 Peace lasted about two and a half years, and Em was an officer for the last eight months of it - the rest of her command experience has been in peacetime.) She didn’t just walk into a command position the second she reported for duty; first, she had to prove herself worthy of being knighted. As it turned out, once she achieved that rank, Em made such a good showing of herself in combat and acquired so much popular support that it would have looked like an overprotective mother’s reverse nepotism for Elaine to refuse to make her an officer. BUT, and I’ve only touched on this VERY briefly in the narrative - Emily has always felt as though Elaine was in some way reluctant to support her military career ambitions, and unfortunately she can’t quite get past being hurt at the idea of “Mum doesn’t support me” to the deeper reason behind it. Fact is, Elaine tried to steer her daughter away from active service and into an intelligence-gathering sentry position because Elaine has seen far too many impetuous young officers just like her daughter get so desperate to protect their people that they end up making errors in judgment and getting themselves, or others, needlessly killed. Like Catherine said, Em goes onto a battlefield like she expects to take the enemy army down all by herself, but the downside of Em’s bravery and love for others is that war can bring out the grandstanding control freak in her in a big way (remember when she tried to forbid Severus to go to a Death Eater function because she couldn’t stand the idea that it might put him in danger? Even after she acknowledged that he’s a better spy than she is?) As for a resolution to this…again, all I can say is STAY TUNED!

phoenix 2005.12.15 - 04:47PM 95: Part Third: The Hart Subvertant, Chapter 51 Signed
As, always, I love the new addition…The letter from Lucius, perfect. He really is a smarmy bastard in your story, isn’t he? And it of course led to this is a truly priceless line, The record of the exact words he employed is perhaps not flattering to a man of his dignity and profession, and as such they are not noted here. I really can’t help but hear the narrator’s voice from H2G2 . LOL… And the end, talk about your bad timing… Truly wonderful, I hope the next chapter doesn’t take quite so long. :)

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