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Reviews for Haunted By Her Eyes

Daintress 2006.04.30 - 06:08PM 1: The Reason Revealed Anonymous
I don't suppose he'll have much chance with the new Potions Mistress once word gets out about this!

sinCy 2005.08.23 - 05:25AM 1: The Reason Revealed Anonymous
Not bad, not bad at all.. However, I think in considering that there was once something between Lily and Snape you are waaaaaaaaaay of track. Remember when Lupin tells Harry that his Mother was an 'extraordinarily kind woman'? I think that alone is the reason that she told James t ostop his abuse of Snape. You can see how after Snape calls her a 'Filthy Mudblood' and she basically tells him to bogoff and forgets abouts him that there was never anything between them. Had there once been her response would have been more personal than to just call him 'Snivellus'. Also, who is the Half Blood Prince? :) Sorry if that sounds a bit disparaging, just my opinion!

Guesty... 2005.08.17 - 04:00PM 1: The Reason Revealed Anonymous
... Wow. That was AMAZING!!!

marilyn 2005.07.29 - 09:21AM 1: The Reason Revealed Signed
This is really good stuff. You're almost taking the words out of my head, because I pretty much think that it will be exactly this what J.K.Rowling will reveal in the final book. And also a very good writing. My compliments!

Apythia 2005.07.22 - 12:25PM 1: The Reason Revealed Signed
Oh! Excellent beginning! I am anxious to hear more about it.

Tankarius Argentum 2005.07.11 - 04:38PM 1: The Reason Revealed Signed
Hm... I wonder... Is this a severitus?

Lord_and_Lady_Peeves 2005.04.07 - 06:06PM 1: The Reason Revealed Anonymous
Oh my god, LOVE the chapter. Love the Daniela Castaneta character as well, you have such a knack for writing Original Characters, it's as though you've stolen JK's brain!!! I have to politely disagree with the negative review, as I think a good writer never gives away anything in the 1st chapter (or the whole story for that matter), by being a little more on the vague side you have piqued my interest and allowed my imagination to roam free like a wild chupacabra! I hope Snape will be sharing his story with *The Boy who Lived* and with us as well!!!

Author's Response: lol! Well, I'm glad you like Daniela Castaña, and I'm proud to say that one didn't come from JKR's head. I have a very special muse for that character! ;) I'm glad I've "peaked" your interest, like a wild chupacarba (which my late grandpa would swear up and down that he saw one night). You'll see in chapter two a very critical decision that Snape makes. Thanks for reading and reviewing. ;)

PlaidPooka 2005.04.07 - 02:36PM 1: The Reason Revealed Signed
Exposition is never easy, but I think you have a graceful and light touch with it. Well done! This is just the kind of first chapter that get me wanting to read more. It asks so many questions and I want to know the answers! Fantabulous! :)

Author's Response: *sigh* I love you, Pooka. :) You always make me feel so good. Thanks for reading and reviewing, my SASS-y sista! ;)

lasaire 2005.04.07 - 01:12AM 1: The Reason Revealed Anonymous
Wow. WOW. Very, very nice job. What a wonderful theory on why Harry bothers Snape so much. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you very much. :) I always thought Lily's reaction was a bit suspicious when Snape called her a Mudblood in his memory. They must have at least been friends. Thank you for reading and reviewing. :)

mypreciousss 2005.04.06 - 10:45PM 1: The Reason Revealed Anonymous
Please forgive me, but I'm going to offer a bit of constructive criticism here: Four paragraphs of background information right at the beginning of a story is a bit of an interest-killer. And although you have some nice seething tension between Harry and Snape (I like the way Harry starts getting shirty with Snape! That's very in keeping with what we're seeing in canon), there's no hint of a plot until the very end of the chapter, when we are given cause to wonder what Harry is planning, and why Lily gets under Snape's skin so badly - since Snape hasn't expressed any interest in the new Potions Mistress yet, that's not plot yet, although it's obviously going to be at some point. To hook a reader, you want them to wonder "why is this going on? I want to know more" as soon as possible. Perhaps the story should have started with Harry in detention, having that conversation with Snape?

Author's Response: Oh, preciousss, it's okay. You are entitled to constructive criticism. As long as the criticism is meant to build and not destroy, I'm open to it. :) After all, that writers want to hear from other writers to know how to improve, right? ;) I really hadn't meant to have such a long intro, but it ending up happening that way. I pictured it in my head to be shorter, but it didn't come out that way on paper/monitor. I purposely put the "plot" at the end of the chapter, trying to build up the tension to the point where Snape confesses to Harry, something he wouldn't normally do unless he was really PO'ed. You'll see why the thought of Lily is so painful in the next chapter. ;) As for the Potions mistress... maybe she's there not as a love interest. Maybe she's there as support. Dumbledore hires the right people for the job, and he generally has more than one job for them. ;) Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment on how to improve and tone my skills. :)

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