Reviews for The Seer
Apothecaria |
2005.02.24 - 09:43AM |
1: Part One: Falling Afoul of the Muggle World |
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You're a good storyteller. There'a a lot that keeps it moving along here: the tension between Snape and the students, the appearance of his muggle counterpart, Dumbledore's unhelpfulness thus far, and just enough backstory to give it depth. Don't we all take perverse pleasure in the helplessness of wizards in the muggle world? And I feel the same way about McDonald's.
Author's Response: Thank you! I love your very precise reviews, Apothecaria; you always discuss what worked with the actual writing - which is very helpful to someone who is trying to improve their writing. Thanks! |
aerynfire |
2005.02.24 - 12:05AM |
1: Part One: Falling Afoul of the Muggle World |
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Very entertaining! Oh man...the McDonald's bits were priceless! Can't wait to see what you come up with next. Great job keeping Snape IC. ~Aeryn
Author's Response: Thank you!
Did I say they were eating at McDonalds? I didn't say they were eating at McDonalds. Everyone assumes it was McDonalds; you'd almost think we'd all had a common experience with the place, or something. :D Maybe that big "M" on the sign stands for "Muggles". |
devilsadvocate |
2005.02.23 - 10:40PM |
1: Part One: Falling Afoul of the Muggle World |
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Hello mouse,
I really liked the path this story is taking. I thought it was a really interesting to place the three of them in the muggle world, unarmed. And also introducing JKR as a character, a real touch of daring. It is the bold who will go far. I will be watching out to see how this story progresses. I cannot wait to see how will you characterise JKR. In fact I hope you post the next chapter soon, because the anticipation is too much to bear.
I would rate it ten. What an amazing story line.
With Love,
The Devil's Advocate
Author's Response: Thank you so much! JKR shows up in part two, although only near the end. Hopefully no one is going to get in too much of a twist over a real person being inserted into the story (mouse starts to sweat profusely) - well, here's hoping! |
Alynna |
2005.02.23 - 07:47PM |
1: Part One: Falling Afoul of the Muggle World |
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Awesome. More soon?
Author's Response: Yep. :D Part two is in the queue, waiting to be (hopefully!) validated. You should see it soon. Part three will have to wait a while - the real world is currently glaring at me with its hands on its hips, tapping its foot impatiently. |
LariLee |
2005.02.23 - 06:13PM |
1: Part One: Falling Afoul of the Muggle World |
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What a terrific start, mouse! I love the reaction to McDonald's! I love the cops! I love the bit about the wands! And I love Snape deciding Ron and Hermione would not sleep together! All hell, I just love the whole thing! ~Lisa
Author's Response: Thank you so much - part two isn't as funny, but I hope you'll still like it.
Author's Response: BTW, I'm fairly new here, but I've been reading some of your stuff lately, and I looooove your writing. :D |
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