Reviews for Making an Effort
Trickie Woo |
2005.05.19 - 09:05PM |
7: In the Dungeons |
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This keeps getting better and better, update soon.
Author's Response: Glad you're staying with it. I'll try to get this finished before HBP. |
Trickie Woo |
2005.05.19 - 08:48PM |
6: In London |
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I kond of agrre with Snape about the Underground. I prefer the top of a red London bus. When I go to London I only use the Underground if time is a factor. I almost forgot to add this
Author's Response: The creepiness of the Underground aside, it's sort of weird that he would have a phobia about it, considering he lives in a dungeon. |
Trickie Woo |
2005.05.19 - 08:47PM |
6: In London |
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Tonks know how to manipulate Umbridge, the master manipulator! And now a little romance, or maybe it's horniness creeps into the story. Poor Snape, he is forever being betrayed by his penis.
Author's Response: He wouldn't be the first man to be betrayed this way. As for romance or horniness, Severus is rather in denial at this point about the possibility of either. |
Trickie Woo |
2005.05.19 - 08:16PM |
5: Back to School |
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Your Snape has a very strong moral streak, how does he deal with it among the Deatheates? Iguess most of them are too damn dumb to notice and the others her handles with occlumency. I loved his remark about redundancy.I see he has some vanity also.
Author's Response: I think his moral streak is the reason why he left the DEs. Glad you like my jokes. And yes, we find out about his vanity in PoA, when he's so pleased at the possibility of getting an Order of Merlin. |
Trickie Woo |
2005.05.19 - 06:01PM |
3: The Summons, More Drinking, and Poisonous Mushrooms |
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I just started reading this story today and have been enjoying it, your Snape has a much more definable sense of humor than most other Snapes. When I read his description of Voldemort as "the love child of a basilisk and Wendolin the Wierd" I knew it was going to be my kind of story and I'll stick with it now till the bitter end. I love that kind of dark, snarky, ironic humor. Every one of your characters is in character, plus they all have a slight edge to them. I don't like dark angst, but I love dark ironic humor and snarkyness just makes it better.
Author's Response: Thanks! There's going to be some angst, but my favourite aspect of Snape is his sense of humour, and I'm going to try and keep that uppermost while writing this story. |
phoenix |
2005.05.19 - 08:34AM |
7: In the Dungeons |
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Nicely done. I really like how this is all coming together. It was great how Severus could easily slip into the beat up the Gryffindor mode. Of course, she had kind of earned it with her little kiss. Great job showing her having many Black traits despite her trying to deny her heritage.
Author's Response: Maybe becoming an Auror was Tonks' ultimate denial of her heritage. As far as beating up Gryffindors goes, I try to show Severus being effortless about it, on account of how much practice he's had. |
LariLee |
2005.05.19 - 08:31AM |
7: In the Dungeons |
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I love their different perceptions! And the way Tonks snaps back about his appearance. Wonderfully done! ~Lisa
Author's Response: Thanks! And I think she would snap back. A total doormat of a woman just doesn't work with Snape, in my view. |
Sigune |
2005.05.19 - 08:23AM |
7: In the Dungeons |
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Mmm, more goodies... I like how this relationship is developing, and very thankful for the absence of sweetness and light - canon!Snape just doesn't work that way :-). Of course I must second the other reviewers in their comments (the Lucius line, and Bella's "Prank", and Tonks' manoeuvre), and add that the twist you give to Tonks' clumsiness is highly original and makes wonderful sense. I like that sort of thing. Hope to read more soon!
Author's Response: Sweetness and light just isn't my thing, which is probably how I ended up a Snapefan in the first place. With regard to my take on Tonks' clumsiness, I was inspired by my ten-year-old daughter's clumsiness. She has been growing so rapidly, her coordination can't keep up and she struggles to go about her daily activities with arms, legs, and fingers that are longer than they were scant months ago. She has been driving me up the wall by constantly dropping things on the floor, and often drops them multiple times as she tries to pick them up. So I thought, maybe a Metamorphagus' constantly-changing form means she doesn't get used to where her body ends, and the rest of the world begins, resulting in chaos. |
Tethered Serpent |
2005.05.19 - 02:37AM |
7: In the Dungeons |
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Hah, nice job. I don't suppose you'd be interested in casually dropping the circumstances in which Bella nearly got Snape killed, 'for a laugh'? I'm ravenously curious.
Author's Response: Hmm...now I'll have to think of something :) |
Tethered Serpent |
2005.05.19 - 01:39AM |
4: Shopping, And Then Lunch |
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I just found this, and have been happily catching up on the beginning. I love the intensity of the Snape/Sirius antagonism: you do it well. And you were right to ditch first person; I'm enjoying the bits with Tonks.
My favourite line this chapter: "We had her for dinner at the Burrow a couple of weeks ago." And I thought Molly said she liked the Beauxbatons teacher? *grins madly*
Author's Response: Thanks! I love writing the Sirius/Severus antagonism, and plan on doing more. And yes, the first person is hard to maintain. As for your last observation: that's the challenge of writing in the HP world. There are so many more connotations to everything. |
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