Reviews for The Tenth Rule
| tangerine dream |
2011.02.21 - 05:48PM |
44: The Beginning of the End. |
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| Oh Meow!!! The claws are most certainly out now!!! |
| Sith Witch |
2011.01.14 - 04:27PM |
43: Hurtful Consequences |
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| I wonder how Severus would have reacted if Beth had thank HIM for being her first lover and for such an amazing experience. Has anyone ever thanked him? For much of anything? The man can make love, or have sex, like no ones business. A gem like that needs to be appreciated and showered with praise. Severus has never had love reciprocated so a simple heartfelt thank you might melt his cold heart ... just a little tiny bit. |
| June W |
2011.01.13 - 01:57AM |
43: Hurtful Consequences |
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Well, she was right -- if she'd kept quiet, they could have both had that "certain silent harmony". I am very curious about how things will proceed in her next detention after Hogsmeade, and what she will tell Alice. Glad that Severus cleaned her up and gave her the brief massage. Thanks for the new chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for writing. Some of those questions will be answered...soonish. |
| Sith Witch |
2011.01.12 - 08:00PM |
43: Hurtful Consequences |
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| Up date soon. Can't wait to read Alice's next session with Severus. |
| Sith Witch |
2011.01.12 - 07:58PM |
33: Atypical Correction |
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Wow, can you describe a man giving head to a woman. SEXY!! loved it. have read this chapter twice and will again. Just one comment, less description of what Snape and Alice are thinking. Could condense some of this. More action and less thought. :0)
Author's Response: Tsk,tsk...Tenth Rule is more story than action I'm afraid. That's why the story is so long, the detail...As you have discovered, everything is described in detail, even the non-action bits ;-) Thanks for writing. |
| Sith Witch |
2011.01.11 - 08:45PM |
40: Proving Herself |
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| By the way I have never read a description of oral sex as good as the one you wrote in this chapter. WoW!! |
| Sith Witch |
2011.01.11 - 08:42PM |
41: Bloody Consummation |
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| I love your description of Severus entering Beth for the first time and how gentle he is ... until later. ( Makes me wish I had lost my virginity to Severus.) Very sensual, and sexy. It was so vivid in my mind's eye it was as if I were watching a movie. |
| Sith Witch |
2011.01.11 - 08:32PM |
42: Double the pain...double the pleasure |
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| Shocking, horrifying, nasty, twisted, gross, raw, and sexy. Loved it!! |
| Sith Witch |
2011.01.11 - 08:29PM |
42: Double the pain...double the pleasure |
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| OH MY GOD you are twisted!!! (I like that : 0) That was awesome! The tension was spellbinding. (so to speak) I am still shivering. You surprised me with the duplication spell, I had guessed a spell that enlarged him or he was going to use some sort of object. What a sexual fetish! No wonder the hookers refuse to participate with him. Too fun. |
| Sith Witch |
2011.01.11 - 05:37PM |
40: Proving Herself |
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Loving this story. The sexual tension, the dominance and submission Snape has over the girls. The sex scenes are steamy hot. Your imagination is scary. LOL. Snape's desires and willingness to wait, to tease, and then take what he wants is thrilling. Your take on Snape is very believable. One comment I have, that is not meant to be a downer, is I think this story is too long. I like the descriptions of what the girls are thinking but they are sometimes repetitive. I find myself skimming paragraphs because the same information was described in the previous chapter. To many long detailed musings of the girls slows the story down, breaks the pacing.
Just some thoughts.
Author's Response: Thanks for your comments. Its good to read you're enjoying the story so far. With regards to the way its written...its the way I write I suppose. The Tenth Rule, was/is a dark story, with some sex in it. That's bascially it. I'm sure the story could be condensed and completed within twenty chapters. I had no idea when I started it, it would grow to the size it has but then I've never written fan fiction before. But writing for three different characters requires three different perspectives, that's three different points of view, along with the frequent reevaluation of each characters thoughts, fears, worries, concerns etc regarding their circumstances, will make parts repetitive and drawn out. Everything gradually evolves in The Tenth Rule, as circumstances in life do. The plot of The Tenth Rule was all planned out before the first word was even typed, its just taking far longer to get to the last chapter than I thought it would, but its a story that can't be rushed, because I do not write that way. I am glad however that you have been able to follow the story even though skipping various bits...and thank you for your comments. Its always good to get feedback, and I hope you continue to enjoy The Tenth Rule.
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