Reviews for Of Squibs and Wizards
Verity Brown |
2005.05.28 - 09:16PM |
5: Chapter Five |
Signed |
Hehehehe! Love the shirt! I'm a little confused at some of the details, though. At first I thought Voldie had still not been defeated yet--that's what you imply in chapter 2. And now it seems that he's already dead. Then there was the comment in chapter 4 that Snape's family was pureblood and the American Marvolos were not. And here we learn that the Marvolos were purebloods. So, there's my first concrit for you: continuity! Make sure all the details agree. Otherwise the reader gets awfully confused. I do like this story, though. |
Jessica |
2005.03.09 - 05:08PM |
5: Chapter Five |
Anonymous |
Oh my god i CAN'T believe shes wearing that please keep updateing its really good! |
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